tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post7927346408377230306..comments2024-03-08T08:13:52.256+00:00Comments on The Flash Fiction Offensive: Heisting Miss October by Chris Allinotte...David Barberhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00231973272530266336noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-1227036552313278762011-02-20T19:45:36.234+00:002011-02-20T19:45:36.234+00:00great stuff chris..great stuff chris..Michael Solenderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01120045114297450520noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-69900650552915135032011-02-20T16:46:45.721+00:002011-02-20T16:46:45.721+00:00Chris,
I can't remember reading a crime piece ...Chris,<br />I can't remember reading a crime piece of yours before. This is f*cking awesome. Your story goes from sweetheart days to mad criminal in a blink.Both boys are great characters. Yeehaa! Heisting Miss October indeed. I'd love to see this fleshed out into a novella or novel even.Jodi MacArthurhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13373591664178281529noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-88413407695039076462011-02-19T07:30:36.165+00:002011-02-19T07:30:36.165+00:00Nick Heyward was rockin' in the day, dude!Nick Heyward was rockin' in the day, dude!A Daft Scots Lasshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01922985143036647579noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-55180161952006493342011-02-18T09:55:57.840+00:002011-02-18T09:55:57.840+00:00Absolutely terrific - loved it! Nice work!Absolutely terrific - loved it! Nice work!Authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14581854897484618741noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-23116851518603287212011-02-18T01:54:13.977+00:002011-02-18T01:54:13.977+00:00Chris this was great. You have a distinct voice th...Chris this was great. You have a distinct voice that I found entertaining.<br /><br />Jeanette CheezumAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-42936387741904318642011-02-17T20:25:02.035+00:002011-02-17T20:25:02.035+00:00This was so much fun to read. I love the "rub...This was so much fun to read. I love the "rubber lips and sweaty jowls." Just an excellent way to get a picture of the guy's face. Also, a brilliant look at how our experiences change us. Nice work.Rick Carrhttp://twitter.com/IAmRickSeenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-10469217430838320762011-02-17T17:18:30.665+00:002011-02-17T17:18:30.665+00:00Bang on the money! Great work, Chris and a great l...Bang on the money! Great work, Chris and a great last line.Alan Griffithshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12890190137499272096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-69577716526682299722011-02-17T16:44:35.587+00:002011-02-17T16:44:35.587+00:00A charming voice for a more light-hearted dark tal...A charming voice for a more light-hearted dark tale. I look forward to reading more of your work, Chris.M. C. Funkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00088827164403855506noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-77299503964481739722011-02-17T15:09:30.696+00:002011-02-17T15:09:30.696+00:00Great work. Choice phrases ('gut the register&...Great work. Choice phrases ('gut the register') and vivid scenes (I was with them when they opened that Playboy) really bring the protagonist to life. There's a novel's worth of character development in this here short story.AK Dawsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02370717854503364567noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-26637604745592946782011-02-17T14:32:37.389+00:002011-02-17T14:32:37.389+00:00That was some seriously righteous shit. You captur...That was some seriously righteous shit. You captured the kids from the 70's piece of it spot on. Loved this one!Sean Patrick Reardonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14051252366031997054noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-39442448434433956212011-02-17T11:00:31.216+00:002011-02-17T11:00:31.216+00:00A nice piece of writing, Chris. Great job of tying...A nice piece of writing, Chris. Great job of tying-in his first heist with the present day gig.Alan W. Davidsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17067022519729701245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-13246200464104342402011-02-17T09:23:54.141+00:002011-02-17T09:23:54.141+00:00Great story Chris. The voice had me hanging onto e...Great story Chris. The voice had me hanging onto every word.Charlie Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11210253827591256777noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-11562714680684959592011-02-17T03:04:39.812+00:002011-02-17T03:04:39.812+00:00Awesome. I think most of us can relate to the play...Awesome. I think most of us can relate to the playboy heist.cbhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10110427402666392960noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-19924312662032661982011-02-17T01:47:24.625+00:002011-02-17T01:47:24.625+00:00Chris--thanks for bringing back memories of one ce...Chris--thanks for bringing back memories of one certain summer when a small gang of us pulled a similar small town heist. I don't think any of us ever met the actual centerfold, though. :) Great story.kurtnewtonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18051603523265529385noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-54094338450550731392011-02-17T01:02:53.426+00:002011-02-17T01:02:53.426+00:00Great job, Chris. This was excellent, and it would...Great job, Chris. This was excellent, and it would have been merely good without the authentic voice you gave to the piece.<br /><br />Bellisimo.<br /><br />Julie<br />www.testrossabook.comJulie Dhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07722733521306692769noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-31575798093747754532011-02-16T23:44:42.285+00:002011-02-16T23:44:42.285+00:00Thanks for all the great comments everyone. Angel ...Thanks for all the great comments everyone. Angel got pretty close to the truth - there's something magical in that first glimpse of adulthood. And the rest was just tremendous fun to write.Chris Alliniottehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04094925215735680849noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-1102411148883434432011-02-16T22:15:24.214+00:002011-02-16T22:15:24.214+00:00very well done... we have all lusted after the cen...very well done... we have all lusted after the centerfold. great job!Bill Babernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-76978326006508007142011-02-16T21:52:55.497+00:002011-02-16T21:52:55.497+00:00Excellent pen, Chris. You crafted the dialogue per...Excellent pen, Chris. You crafted the dialogue perfectly and I love how the past played into the future. Great title too-EChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09359075647077590741noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-15111343123027726372011-02-16T20:49:43.710+00:002011-02-16T20:49:43.710+00:00So good. And you brought back memories of my first...So good. And you brought back memories of my first adult mag. It was an issue of "Oui." Good times. And knocking off candy stores is pretty sweet too. Great voice you penned here.Angel Zapatahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01166540490117426226noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-22129596055422290992011-02-16T20:47:44.625+00:002011-02-16T20:47:44.625+00:00Loved the undercurrent of humour balanced with the...Loved the undercurrent of humour balanced with the feeling potential for extreme violence. A really smooth piece of story-telling here, Chris. Quality, quality, quality, all the way. Top stuff, sir.Ian Ayrishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02938603752420100222noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-44895933974639379712011-02-16T20:47:27.610+00:002011-02-16T20:47:27.610+00:00Sometimes with flash fic piece, it might feel rush...Sometimes with flash fic piece, it might feel rushed or as if something was left out, but this is such a perfect fit, it's as if it doesn't need another word. It's very well crafted.<br /><br />On top of that, the story is just wonderful on every other level. I loved the way you chose to tell it, the narrator's voice, and it all came across as fresh and original.<br /><br />Well done.R.S. Bohnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09101260459422806220noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-42173948693122329382011-02-16T20:10:35.190+00:002011-02-16T20:10:35.190+00:00'my blood runs cold...' smashing! A lot do...'my blood runs cold...' smashing! A lot done in a 1000 words.Paul D Brazillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12881642426845398389noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-66279157937914964622011-02-16T20:01:52.644+00:002011-02-16T20:01:52.644+00:00This was excellent, Chris. There's a great vo...This was excellent, Chris. There's a great voice in this. The story is great and the writing just tops it off! A job well done!David Barberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00231973272530266336noreply@blogger.com