tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post7984774023245377875..comments2024-03-08T08:13:52.256+00:00Comments on The Flash Fiction Offensive: Fast Way Out by Jaie D. MaclaneDavid Barberhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00231973272530266336noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-83476983830637503682011-11-24T23:55:41.900+00:002011-11-24T23:55:41.900+00:00Great stuff Jaie, as usual. Love the realism and g...Great stuff Jaie, as usual. Love the realism and grittiness of the characters and the originality you gave to a recurring theme. Want more!Gabriel Sigmahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08732491325844446181noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-5246934332497316052011-10-11T02:18:58.664+01:002011-10-11T02:18:58.664+01:00Great characters! Really liked this.Great characters! Really liked this.Lacyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01862278909024965491noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-1750959618958038692011-10-08T02:20:54.270+01:002011-10-08T02:20:54.270+01:00Yes, there's an acho in here. I would also li...Yes, there's an acho in here. I would also like to read the further adventures of these two. Excellent read.Mike Minernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-48339650622953925012011-10-07T20:15:17.747+01:002011-10-07T20:15:17.747+01:00Thanks guys. Yup. Where would a crime-fiction writ...Thanks guys. Yup. Where would a crime-fiction writing hobby be without at least one clichéd convenience store robbery scene? Glad you all enjoyed it (perhaps more than I did). Thanks for reading. :)Jaie D. Maclanehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13820857922403729666noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-16014269104468919712011-10-07T05:02:22.269+01:002011-10-07T05:02:22.269+01:00Ah, the convenience store robbery. Seems like ther...Ah, the convenience store robbery. Seems like there's a million fun ways to write this one. Here's an angle I've never seen before. Well done.Chris Rhatiganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05769089157184374652noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-40423668678490824092011-10-07T00:21:57.597+01:002011-10-07T00:21:57.597+01:00Good story, Jaie. Dug what you did with the fat m...Good story, Jaie. Dug what you did with the fat man- that deer in the headlights mentality. Another chapter of the story would be cool, but the ending as is lets one's imagination work and that's just as good. And like the man, James Ellroy, said: closure is bullshit.<br /><br />Regardless, looking forward to what's next from the Midwest hard girl.Mike Wilkersonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00771502395254223219noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-70583652391017227822011-10-06T22:17:05.702+01:002011-10-06T22:17:05.702+01:00Now that's one perfect damn story! For anybody...Now that's one perfect damn story! For anybody who's ever wanted out of a town so bad he'd have ridden with the devil and a case of the crabs to get clear of the place (raising hand -- that would be me)this tale clicks so hard it could splinter your teeth.<br />Characters -- including the cypher behind the counter -- come clear and true. The humor is so damn graveyard funny it brought laughter right up from my toes. Liked it? You damn betcha I did! Cool.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-65528338383136706152011-10-06T21:51:17.587+01:002011-10-06T21:51:17.587+01:00Great characters and really got the feel of the ho...Great characters and really got the feel of the hopelessness and the need to change his life.<br /><br />It has pace too which I love and a certain amount of humour. Great job!Fiona Johnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11327414379413053096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-67375065629500518272011-10-06T16:29:16.294+01:002011-10-06T16:29:16.294+01:00Now that was a well written, fast paced story that...Now that was a well written, fast paced story that did not let up. I friggin' hate this term, almost as much as "craft", but "the voice" was awesome. Your blog looks really good as well and I'm looking forward to more of you stories.Sean Patrick Reardonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14051252366031997054noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-38032260854951349402011-10-06T13:47:44.326+01:002011-10-06T13:47:44.326+01:00Chris said it, Jaie! I like this one and think you...Chris said it, Jaie! I like this one and think your next visit to FFO should be chapter two!!Thomas Pluckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17008022962076648740noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-11575782579129719322011-10-06T13:30:49.367+01:002011-10-06T13:30:49.367+01:00Great characterisation in this piece, Jaie. Add t...Great characterisation in this piece, Jaie. Add to that a great plot and great writing and you have a perfect story. Well done!<br /><br />I agree with Chris. This could be the start of something bigger...and I hope it is.David Barberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05006533626998905560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1289201915273996479.post-29203330847024650392011-10-06T13:20:23.179+01:002011-10-06T13:20:23.179+01:00This reads like the opening chapter of a book I...This reads like the opening chapter of a book I'd definitely read.<br /><br />The characterization is what works best here, the nuances, and the realistic ugliness of the clerk's terror, and the fact that the stick-up man wasn't a stereotypical tough guy. <br /><br />I'll be watching out for more!Chris Alliniottehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04094925215735680849noreply@blogger.com