Donkey by Paul D. Brazill

The decision, once Duncan had made it, became like a gate creaking in the wind or a leaky tap dripping and keeping him awake at night until, eventually, thought congealed into action. He stormed down York Road, his raincoat flapping in the wind, oblivious to the puking, mewling drunks in his wake.

The night was as cold as a shop soiled spinster. Duncan’s glasses steamed up as soon as he pushed his way into the sweltering kebab shop, the smell almost suffocating.

"Alright, Donkey,"said Charlie, pushing his thick horn rimmed glasses back up his greasy nose. Duncan reached under his coat and pulled out a sawn of shotgun that immediately exploded, as did most of Charlies’s face.

The customers scattered like frightened birds apart from an old man who stood frozen to the spot a, dew drop dangling from his nose.

"Why?" he asked. "Why?"

"He aw, he aw, he aw – he always c-c- calls me f –f- fuckin’ d- d- donkey," said Duncan as the sound of the police sirens grew into a scream.



Bio: Paul D. Brazill was born in Hartlepool, England and is on the lam in Bydgoszcz, Poland. He has had stories in A Twist Of Noir, Powder Burn Flash, Thrillers Killers n Chillers, Beat To A Pulp, and other such classy joints. He can be found stalking ‘you would say that, wouldn’t you?’ at http://pdbrazill.blogspot.com/

14 comments:

Michael Solender said...

Heaaw.. ffffrrreeekkkinnnn wild.

Glenn Gray said...

Ha! Cool nasty blast.

Jake Hinkson said...

Well, I'll think twice about calling Duncan names, I guess.

Eric Beetner said...

I have this impression of you, Paul, sitting out in public, a kebab shop say, and jotting these stories down on a napkin and tucking them away. Just to get the thoughts out of your head so they don't come out some other way, y'know?
And it scares me.

Paul D. Brazill said...

Ta all. People called Duncan have enough problems these days since they all seemed to be nicknamed Donut!

David Barber said...

Loved this first time Paul, and it's still as good!

Alan Griffiths said...

Great to read this one again Paul. Top stuff.

Charles Gramlich said...

Don't push a donkey. I mean, a duncan, too far. Good un.

Pamila Payne said...

Always root for the underdonkey. Good one.

peggy said...

I love it when your works spread to meet a new audience.

This ending still has punch, even upon multiple reads.

Christopher Pimental said...

I always thought being called donkey was a good thing...

Paul D. Brazill said...
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randallmarx said...

A good story, direct and to the point.

Ian Ayris said...

Brilliant, mate. Got a sort of really scary out of control feeling to it. Disturbing and hilarious all at the same time - and that's a combination to make a man uneasy. Fantastically written, as usual, and I can't help thinking Duncan might not be completely fictional . . .