The night was as cold as a shop soiled spinster. Duncan’s glasses steamed up as soon as he pushed his way into the sweltering kebab shop, the smell almost suffocating.
"Alright, Donkey,"said Charlie, pushing his thick horn rimmed glasses back up his greasy nose. Duncan reached under his coat and pulled out a sawn of shotgun that immediately exploded, as did most of Charlies’s face.
The customers scattered like frightened birds apart from an old man who stood frozen to the spot a, dew drop dangling from his nose.
"Why?" he asked. "Why?"
"He aw, he aw, he aw – he always c-c- calls me f –f- fuckin’ d- d- donkey," said Duncan as the sound of the police sirens grew into a scream.
Bio: Paul D. Brazill was born in Hartlepool, England and is on the lam in Bydgoszcz, Poland. He has had stories in A Twist Of Noir, Powder Burn Flash, Thrillers Killers n Chillers, Beat To A Pulp, and other such classy joints. He can be found stalking ‘you would say that, wouldn’t you?’ at http://pdbrazill.blogspot.com/
14 comments:
Heaaw.. ffffrrreeekkkinnnn wild.
Ha! Cool nasty blast.
Well, I'll think twice about calling Duncan names, I guess.
I have this impression of you, Paul, sitting out in public, a kebab shop say, and jotting these stories down on a napkin and tucking them away. Just to get the thoughts out of your head so they don't come out some other way, y'know?
And it scares me.
Ta all. People called Duncan have enough problems these days since they all seemed to be nicknamed Donut!
Loved this first time Paul, and it's still as good!
Great to read this one again Paul. Top stuff.
Don't push a donkey. I mean, a duncan, too far. Good un.
Always root for the underdonkey. Good one.
I love it when your works spread to meet a new audience.
This ending still has punch, even upon multiple reads.
I always thought being called donkey was a good thing...
A good story, direct and to the point.
Brilliant, mate. Got a sort of really scary out of control feeling to it. Disturbing and hilarious all at the same time - and that's a combination to make a man uneasy. Fantastically written, as usual, and I can't help thinking Duncan might not be completely fictional . . .
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